Letter – You are going to leave your apartment in an English speaking country and your landlord is a very good person, who has assisted you a lot during your stay.
| You are going to leave your apartment in an English-speaking country, and your landlord is a very good person who has assisted you a lot during your stay. Meanwhile, your friend wants to rent the flat after you. Write a letter to your landlord and – let your landlord know about your leaving, – thank your landlord for his/her help, – tell him/her about your friend. |
Dear Mr. John,
I am writing to inform you that I, Ashish, a tenant in Apartment 10, Melton Grove, Bissonnet Street, will vacate the property at the end of July. This decision comes as my current lease expires, and I have been transferred to Kansas City for work.
First and foremost, I would like to express my gratitude for your exceptional management over the past four years. For instance, whenever I reported maintenance issues, you resolved them promptly—a level of service I’ve rarely seen in other apartments. Additionally, the facilities you provide, such as free laundry and parking, consistently surpass those of neighbouring buildings, which is why I’ve always recommended your property to others.
With this in mind, I’d like to introduce my friend Samir, who will be relocating to Houston in August. To highlight his suitability, he is a single professional (working at McDonald’s) with a lifestyle similar to mine, making this apartment ideal for him. Not only have I shared details about the property’s advantages with him, but he is also eager to sign a lease for the next year.
In closing, thank you again for your kindness during my tenancy. I sincerely hope you’ll consider Samir as your next tenant, ensuring a smooth transition for both parties.
Yours sincerely,
James
Score Breakdown & Analysis
1. Task Achievement (Band 7+)
- Why? The letter achieves its goals: announcing departure, thanking the landlord, and recommending a new tenant.
- Example: The purpose is stated upfront (“I am writing to inform you”), and each paragraph logically progresses the request.
2. Coherence & Cohesion (Band 7+)
- Why? Uses signposting (e.g., “First and foremost,” “Additionally,” “In closing”) to guide the reader.
- Example: “With this in mind” smoothly transitions from praise to the recommendation.
3. Lexical Resource (Band 6.5-7)
- Why? Avoids repetition (e.g., “vacating” instead of “moving out”; “exceptional management” instead of “very nice”).
- Improvement: Could add more sophisticated vocabulary (e.g., “testament to your professionalism”).
4. Grammar (Band 7)
- Why? Few errors, with varied sentence structures (e.g., “Not only… but also”).
- Note: The Original had minor issues like “this year’s lease is finishing” (rewritten as “expires” for conciseness).